My First Time… (or, The Virgin Short Story Writer)

Note: This Post Originally featured on the WickedWriters Blog…

There I was, idly sitting at my desk, twiddling with my mouse, thinking about more marketing moves to help with the promotion of River of Judgement, when I stumbled upon a competition. A short story competition was to be held as part of the Theakstons Old Peculier Crime Writing Festival, in the lovely Yorkshire town of Harrogate.

‘Here,’ says I, ‘is my chance to mix it with the likes of Ian Rankin, Val McDermid, Stuart MacBride, Christopher Brookmyre, Jeffery Deaver and Joanne Harris.’

All that was asked of me was to write a short crime story between 2,000 and 5,000 words long, beginning with a first line provided by Stuart MacBride:

“In my experience, those who beg for mercy seldom deserve it”

‘That,’ says I, ‘might be the start of it… but how the hell do I get from there to the end in under 5000 words?’ I’d never written a short story in my life! I don’t count those stories you get to write at school; I was never very good at English as a subject – either language or literature, but that is another, long, story.

Over a pint of ale (not Theakstons) in the village ale-house, my good friend, neighbour, and ex-journalist turned PR consultant, Ian, offered me a gem of advice. ‘Like a mini-skirt, David. Long enough to cover the essentials and short enough to hold your interest.’ (A very male point of view, I admit – but this is a Wicked place.)

The essentials? The plot. A crime would be a good start, and taking a lead from Aristotle: a beginning, middle and an end; the classic three-acts. Yes, I knew all that, but under 5000 words? ‘Come on… get real! And forget flash fiction, I’m not ready for that! I need help’, I (nearly) cried.

As luck would have it, I listen to a lot of talk radio during the day. That week there had been a series of afternoon plays, all adapted from Chekov short stories. ‘Hey, he’s famous, isn’t he? I heard myself say. ‘He wrote loads of short stories! Now what was that one I heard on Tuesday?’ I tried to remember the one that I missed the middle of because I was distracted by something. ‘A short skirt, wasn’t it?’ I mused.

More Plotting?

Why re-invent the wheel. If, according to Christopher Booker, there are only seven basic plots, then we must all borrow from someone, somewhere along the line. ‘Why can’t I borrow from the Master!’ And, isn’t the internet wonderful? Moments later, after recalling the title, I had downloaded a copy of Anton Chekov’s The Black Monk – a great story with a supernatural theme.

I read The Black Monk, re-read it, and leant back in my chair. ‘Cool, this guy can write short stories.’ So, being an engineer I deconstructed the plot. I worked out that it had nine plot points. Not listing these, but if you are not sure of how something should look, deconstruction is a technique I would recommend. Why do some people love taking things apart? I always took things apart as a kid, then put them pack together again. Lego is a great toy! But I digress. This post is about a virgin short story writer.

‘I love that essential theme. The Black Monk. Brilliant! An inevitable decay into madness, punctuated by a love story. I want to mirror that theme and structure in my crime story. Now what’s that line again?’

“In my experience, those who beg for mercy seldom deserve it”.

Pen and paper. I love the old ways. I sat and (cheating here, with a calculator) divided my 5000 word challenge into nine sections. And, realising that simple is always best, I rounded each section to a maximum of 500 words (4500 is under 5000, so I figured I was OK with that). I wrote on my paper nine section titles which basically mirrored the plot points I had identified in Chekov’s story, and started writing. In two afternoons I had completed the story. With my good lady wife doing one editing run through, a few minor changes including ‘… This name doesn’t sound right,’ says she who (sometimes) must be obeyed.

‘Why?’ says I. I had no idea, but a women’s intuition should be listened to (sometimes)!

Some superfluous verbiage was cut out, the titles disposed of and the sections re-grouped into eight, and I had my first proper, non-school short story.

But was it good enough for the competition? Would it win me an audience with some of the great and the good in crime fiction? Would it win me a free entry to the Festival and a chance of being spotted by an Agent or Publisher?

I will never know! I never sent the story into the competition.

‘Why?’ echoed a voice from nowhere.

I liked it; my wife liked it; my mother-in-law liked it. Even one of my four sons liked it.

‘Only one,’ echoed the voice.

‘He was the only one either old enough or not studying for exams at the time. Now, quit with the echoes.’

I thought, ‘Hang on a cotton-picking minute… Am I not a publisher as well as an author? Have I not the courage of my own convictions? Do I really want to wait months for the announcement that my story might, or might not have won? Only to have wasted that time, if it had not. And what was I doing on this planet anyway? (Again, that is another, long, story!)

‘Be serious, a moment,’ I told myself. ‘There you were, sitting idly at your desk, twiddling your mouse, thinking about more marketing moves to help with the promotion of River of Judgement. Don’t you think…?’

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‘Of course!’ Inspiration. I’ve heard that short stories are a great way of showcasing a new writer’s work. ‘Why don’t I publish the short story alongside my novel?’ says I. ‘Marvellous,’ I replied.

The End.

  9 comments for “My First Time… (or, The Virgin Short Story Writer)

  1. April 8, 2010 at 4:10 pm

    David, nice post, and I love the short skirt reference–motivated me to work on a short story. No offense to the ladies. :)

    • April 8, 2010 at 6:40 pm

      That’s great to hear, Brock. And, this being a Wicked place, I’m sure no offence was taken!! :)

      Happy writing.

  2. April 8, 2010 at 12:56 pm

    Absolutely loved your post today, David! You had me laughing AT the edge of my seat and wow, what a bonus at the end! A free story? I’m about to print it off and deconstruct it myself. Eight plots, you say? Hm, we’re at opposite ends of the same boat, as you’ll find out in my post tomorrow.

    P.S. I know everyone’s already said it but it’s worth repeating: the mini-skirt quip is just priceless. 😉

    • April 8, 2010 at 1:22 pm

      Thanks, Supriya. I look forward to seeing the opposite end of the boat tomorrow! :)

  3. April 8, 2010 at 11:28 am

    That’s the BBC version of talk radio – our BBC Radio4. Its one of those stations you start listening too as you get older and wiser. (Apparently!)

    Happy deconstructing 😉

  4. April 8, 2010 at 8:49 am

    I have got to remember that “mini-skirt” axiom.

    And, if readers did not know you were British, David, they should now. “Talk radio” in America is not that deep. Plays? On afternoon radio? Sure, most of our talk show radio hosts might reference Kafka or “Crime And Punishment” but they’re all mostly talking heads.

    And I will definitely get back into deconstructing.

    Great post today.

  5. April 8, 2010 at 8:39 am

    I’m seeing a lot of writers jump on the free short story (or in Stephanie Meyer’s case, not so free) bandwagon to promote their novels. I think it’s a brilliant idea! In Greg’s case, reading his free novella, They Call the Wind Muryah only made me want to buy his other books. In Nicole Hadaway’s case, I read her novel and am looking forward to reading her short side stories on her series. Now I get to sample your work for free. Hot dog!

    Oh, and love the mini skirt / short story analogy!

    • April 8, 2010 at 11:25 am

      Thanks! I loved writing the short. It was a totally different experience, much more immediate. I certainly hope you enjoy reading it.

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